This is the feedback i received from my teacher:
This was a great start for your presentation, and you introduced some great issues and presented some great ideas for Courtelaney Pass in your slides! I really liked your pictures…some were a tad blurry, but the picture choice was nice, as it matched well with your information.
Slides 3, 4, 5 had a lot of information. You can move some of it onto the 4 new slides that you have for next week and see if it will fit. A PowerPoint is just to give basic information and a summary of main points.
For example, on Slide 4, the bullets should only show the main points: I would suggest you trim your bullets down like this:
I propose to take the following action to safeguard these issues from occurring again:
Minimize social injustice-based brutality and reduce the tension between the police and the public
Create awareness on the importance of embracing police officers as their protectors and problem solvers
Educate the public and the police on the importance of embracing each other as a family, despite individual race
What you wrote is too wordy, so use your own words to summarize the main points. Note that no periods are to be used, as bullets are not complete sentences.
On the Reference page, the journal titles need to be in italics and the capitalization of the titles should match what I have in my Sample PowerPoint with the first word of the title (and first word after the colon) being the only capitalized words.
Next week, you will have 4 more slides in which to expand on your issues.
Thank you for sharing!
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